It won't be dark and hopeless until the light of love
begin （
主謂一致，begins）to burn
which appears more significant in darker place. （
這個定語從句用在這里不太合適，可以改成一個句子，love is like light which is brighter in darker places.）I consider it
may be （
這部分刪掉）what the picture
want（
注意主謂一致，wants） to tell us.
0F
0V JE q !EJs:AS During the gray period when all the people on the earth suffered SARS,scientists and doctors
devote （
既然是在說以前的事情就用過去時）themslves and their love to curing the patients , securing
the health （
The healthy people） and arming against the
evil （
plague）.They're exactly respectable.After the earthquake came
to attack （
直接用attacked） Sichuan Province,all the people there were in the darkness
which is painful and awful （
這里的定語從句用的不好，可以刪掉。）.Love from other places in China and from other nations of the world arrived. The people suffered
the agony（
刪掉，這是多余的部分，直接用suffer from….） from the catastrophe were inspired. It's love
as a light who （
變成強調句型，這里改成that beats ….）beat the darkness.
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