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mFGiysM 8lNkY`P7s In my veiw（拼寫）, much can be done to kee （拼寫）fit. on（注意大寫） the one hand, when we finish the work, making some practice （做些運動用doing some exercises更好）is a good way to burn the energy（不應該是消耗你的精力，充其量也就是脂肪吧，所以不如直接寫keep fit好一點）. We should keep（keep沒有花費時間的用法，用spend time in doing） at least half an hour doing some sports. A wonderful body can give us a (精神不可數，所以刪掉冠詞，不定冠詞只用在可數名詞單數前面)good spirit. On the other hand, a rational diet is another measure to keep not only healthy but also beautiful.
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K{vn[} 79yF { 第一段的內容過多，而且第一段不必要舉例說明某個人群需要健康，每人都需要健康。所以第一段你只要敘述健康的重要性就可以了。第二段和第三段的寫作內容還是比較成功的，只是里面有好多的語法錯誤以及馬虎造成的拼寫錯誤導致失分嚴重，今后寫作一定要注意。繼續努力！
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